The words do flow from you. It's like a river of impressions tied together with a concept. In both pieces you're "cleaning up." For me, there is a positive direction. Perhaps I'm selectively reading--I've been accused by family of filtering the negative and seeing the positive, even in life.
I think your joy in making words your servant is infectious. It's the energy that comes through that I find appealing.
As a matter of fact, I'm going to check out that 300 word contest, after reading your entry. Hope you don't mind. My take, of course, will be quite different.
UwU ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for the compliments!
My writing style is a direct hatred for the “show, don’t tell” rule and how much I think showing is just a more eloquent way of telling; if I wanted to show, I can sketch a story up now. I always decided to dig myself deep in dialogue when I just feel disgusted with the “show, don’t tell” rule. But I appreciate that people love what I write down. After all, I play the role as Jester and try to keep the audience’s attention while making them as free as they can be to see what I see.
On the positive direction: not a wrong reading, not wrong at all. But that’s more due to my undying pessimism of things staying the way they are without giving way to radical change or a pathway to its grave. As to relate to Ms Marta: she picked herself up and fights a hopelessly courageous uphill battle against all that keeps her down (as I would refer to breakdown of Dysfunctions that kept an Order around with all its pains). Or to die of overdose which has acted as a less painful method ‘n’ had drowned out all the other greater pains of Life (or as I call, the tragedy of the Dysfunction). Of course, all contradictions are eternal but never have to be faced alone and will require others with the overcoming/supersessions of these struggles. Ms Marta could’ve eventually triumphed from her lowest point but has had her recovery catalyzed with Blue Myst of White-Flame (I would get Lacanian here, but this is now her Other as another Subject).
If yah want to, this is @vermillionfox’s recent contest addition here right now.
Thank you...an intriguing image.