I liked it, action packed from the get go.

If I may, and do not take my opinion too seriously as only you know where the story is going:

Maybe a little past life drama or some familiarity building with Alec's story in the beginning? You know the three phases of effective storytelling are very effective: empathy-struggle (or crisis)-catharsis.

On that note, catharsis in the last part, maybe in the beginning it's worth pointing out that the AI can destroy the whole planer (alerting and keeping viewers on their seats) and later drop them where they expect it the least, where the AI pulls a trick from the hat and saves the day, instead of freely consenting to help?

About the Fema taking over, maybe milk it a little more? That's what people love, drama.

And lastly, as you know in series: The last line goes boom! So maybe something in the sort:

"-Oh my god, that's the end!

• No, this is only the beginning."

Something on the sort, it sounds cheesy but it works.

Anyways, my two cents, this is what hit me :) And as I said don't take it too seriously. You know your story line, and where everything fits...

Promising though, I for one, wanna read more.

Keep up the good stuff and good luck!