RE: A Day in the Clouds (Chapter 10) - The Hours Between 1400 and 1500
"With all the strength I had left, I held on to her wrist tightly and refused to let go. I stopped wiggling my body and focused all of my power on my grip. If she was relentlessly going to kill me with the bomb, then I might as well take her with me."
Whoa Ledd is feisty! He's willing to blow himself up and ensure victory still! Nice thinking.
"The giant looked upon worriedly. I couldn't imagine what was going through her head, bested by a prisoner. Being defeated by a Sachaphoyan was nothing to scoff at, but it would surely taint her legacy."
Oh I loved this phrase about her prestigious giant legacy being flawed for all time in the history archives haha.
"Lowla snuck in and held me down on the bed. She wrapped me around my blanket and wiped the sweat from my skin. What a sneaky move to steal my essence. These giants wasted no time in trying to drain me."
I can quote you all day long bro. Your writing style is impeccable. A refined literary "essence" which no one can steal from you.
"BURP! I let out a loud belch, as an air pocket vacated my body. My chest loosened, and my breathing returned to normal. I panted, trying to catch my breath."
I was surprised to see that Ledd didn't say something to the effect of Viento was escaping my body, being forced out from the inside out with this new insidious poison! after he had Burped. lol
Overall amazing chapter, all the chapters are my favorites, I can't decide. I want to see how he destroys them from the inside out indeed.
He's indeed a feisty little bugger! If he can't be them, and he sure as hell won't join them, then he might as well blow everyone to bits haha! Since English isn't my first language, I really worked hard to refine my writing style. I'm glad it's paying off in dividends. The downside about anonymity though is that most people just pass up on my writing because they think I'm a native speaker haha!
I had thought about writing that it was viento, but I feared that it may be over-saturating it a bit. Good point regarding that though. I might have to revisit that soon.
No need to decide, brother! You can have all the chapters as favorites, and you won't hear any complaints from me! Heck, you can have other books as favorites as well. These comments you left are just validation enough. It's inscribed in the blockchain, so I have these to keep for, well, ever haha!