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RE: Her Heart's Desire [Short Story]
I love this piece! The imagery of the whispering birds, the urge that is no longer there...
My only constructive criticism is that I wish you would be a little more clear what "it" is in the final line that the artist tells her father. What did she want in the first place? To be an artist? I feel like that wouldn't be summed up with "it".
Thanks so much! And yeah, it's a big "it" - wanting to be an artist and whatever other desires came with it. Maybe I can come up with a better wording that would still be natural in conversation...