A Mark on the Windowpane
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5 years ago in #fiction by raj808 (71)
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Wonderful works. So very creative, and I just hate that last part, on the window, in real life.
Yes.... The life of a fly is harsh.
This story is about that trapped feeling. Reality can be brutal.
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Poor little thing...
Eyye.... The life of a fly is harsh.
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That was good... a real exercise. While you do use rich vocabulary, I don't think one word was unnecessary. The virtue of enforced lean writing like this is that we cannot indulge our verbally extravagant tendencies. It's almost like we have a wallet with only so much cash. We have to decide whether using that resource nets sufficient reward or if another expenditure would be wiser. I think every "expenditure" here (of space used by words) was wisely decided.
I think this comment may have used more words than your story :)
Ha ha, maybe so... but I appreciate it 🙂 This story is an extended (not very extended though) metaphor for the brutality of life. Everyone can feel drowned sometimes, but it's never as bad as a fly trapped behind the pane of the window.
😆 Upbeat stuff 😉 cheers for the feedback agmoore
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Life happens to go on but the moments we experience remain with us. This remains with me. And the fly.
Cheers dude. I'm glad the story stuck with you, I wanted it to be kind of shocking at the end. Life ain't easy for the housefly 😆
LOL black-out for the fly @raj808 That was funny. :D
You really are a poet. ;)
Ha ha, yeah it wasn't too good for the housefly 😆 I'm glad you enjoyed the micro-fiction cryptopie, I wanted it to be kind of shocking at the end.
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