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RE: A Wolf's Debt - Part 1 of 2

in #fiction6 years ago

A lovely take on 'the boy who cried wolf', @therosepatch. I really like the anthropomorphized take of the wolves, that's a great idea. The emotional weight of was gripping too.

I really wish though there had been a moment at the moment of her exile to get a better sense if Reyni's thoughts. It felt a little matter-of-fact and abrupt. What was she feeling when Orion gave her Mercy? Perhaps she was in shock, feeling nothing or unable too, and just left as an automatic response. But still...

Either way, I'm looking forward to the next part!

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As I was writing it, I got the feeling that she was kinda numb emotionally by then. She was expecting death, almost welcoming it, and didn't really know how to process the banishment. Then almost immediately after she was thrust into loneliness and near-starvation.

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