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RE: Relationships (Luna 3, Part 5)

in #fiction7 years ago

Up to this point it goes well, but I would like to make an observation if you allow me, I don't know if you already did it in the following chapters but you should vary the scenarios, so far everything revolves around Nora-ceph, but things should be happening in other places, things that you could introduce to give more dynamism to the story, well is just a suggestion, maybe I'm not so good at this. I move on to the next one

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Switching point of view works well in books, it's tricky with a blog-based story. You read all parts after another, but people were waiting days to weeks for a new part, which gives a different reader experience. But I see your point!

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