This chapter has got to be the fastest one I've read in the series. Very concise and simple. I like the transparency of your writing, my friend. LOL kidding, seriously though, as of writing, this has already made $7.11!!! WOW! That's really impressive. Can't wait to read the real thing though.
It's fixed, crap that was a long time it was up like that!
Another well written chapter. Things are finally starting to ramp up! The looming threat of the shadow men have been very effective in increasing the anticipation, and you're finally reaping the harvest of all the character development you have been doing. Dialogue and pacing are awesome, and the strength of the well-defined characters speak for themselves. This already did well with just a cover photo, I'm sure it's going to do better now that it has the content! Great work, my friend :D