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RE: Reborn: Chapter Forty Nine "Five Vampires and a Wolf Walked Into a Bar"

in #fiction7 years ago

So many things going on, I'm not sure where to start haha! Maybe it'll take me the more character-centric chapters to differentiate the new ones. This chapter is very meaty and you tackled a lot of new information. It's all nicely written, but it's just a lot to take in for me. Perhaps this is my inability to process a large cast of characters that is at fault here and not how you presented them, my friend. Reading through this, I'm convinced that it's the case. So, don't mind me lagging behind a bit, I'm sure I'll catch up :D

The way I'm looking at the series so far, it already seems like there are 3 sets of casts. The human friends, the McClaron's and then these new ones. Since the settings are widely different, I think there's a clear point where the story could be divided. But, that's just my opinion. I fully trust your process my friend, and I know that what you've done is the best for the series.

I'm actually not a binge reader, and when I read books I read a chapter a day, so this format works well for me :D In any case, amazing job as always!

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Oh, I'm sure at this point having them straight is not quite possible. This bar scene continues too, lol, and it may help. But, I think you will find it easier as the story continues. Matthias stands out with his nicknames and wiseass attitude, Michael as very polite and proper and steadfast, Tyros as strange and standoffish...etc. But yes, when they get focused on more individually. But even knowing that it's a bit much throwing them all at the readers like that, I couldn't change it. A female vampire who has not been 'turned' who can also breed, would be too important for the group not to all come out and meet her, and also rally around her to protect her.

I do see what you mean about dividing the story, and I really will give it some thought...though we should probably discuss that further once we reach where I chose to end it ;)

But don't think you're upsetting me, you're not at all, I love your input and would not want you to hold back. Thank you my friend!

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