Very nice one. It was taking me along quite smoothly, until I hit those three words: “Then I died.”
That made me really take notice of where the story was going. Just a couple of issues with mechanics and spelling. I find it difficult to proof my own work, so I've started dropping my text into https://www.grammarly.com and it really picks up on issues that I was reading over.
Thank you for your comment, I will definitely have a which at grammarly and see what it throws at me. Then I shall challenge it in my obstinate way lol