Question
he savagely whispered his threat. “Never.”
You lose the great effect of "savage whisper" by adding 'his threat'
For me, this is more effective:
Without raising his head, he savagely whispered, “Never.”
Question
he savagely whispered his threat. “Never.”
You lose the great effect of "savage whisper" by adding 'his threat'
For me, this is more effective:
Without raising his head, he savagely whispered, “Never.”
You think? hmmmm Maybe this is preference then... hehehe I feel like having the nearness of the word "whispered" even though it is savagely whispered... diminishes the fierceness. I don't know why LOL but having threat closer to "never" keeps it more fresh in my mind. hahahaha
love your suggestions though! I can feel your care for every detail of the story!!! :)