Hey @rnunez09, thank you for helping us promote narrative and writing on Steem.

We could say yours was a good story overall. It made good use of technology, but the pacing was a bit hectic. The story has a great use and incorporation of technology, and the idea behind the “fear” factor is interesting, but it loses steam when it comes down to the execution of that fear. However, the idea of an AI acting out because of pure distress instead of vengeance or a world-dominating plot was certainly refreshing and well handled.

In terms of storytelling, we believe the story could have benefited from a more purposeful use of imagery, the old show-don’t-tell business. Additionally, the secondary character’s motivations felt a bit underdeveloped.

Still, this was a very interesting read! Thanks for your submission and best of lucks in the contest!