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RE: #Story: Felicity The Smiling Queen, Part One: The Surprise!

in #bigwaves6 years ago

I love the happy ending.

Pls take note :

He was going to go to the city - He was going to the city.

He told them he was going to the city centre.

and (with a) smile the(that) could bring out the happiness in you.

All the statement in quote should be in paragraph and alone.

"Are you seeing someone?" She smiled
"No" Chapman smiled back to her as she returned the question.

You're very good in a driving home a story.

I think you can write for this contest.
https://steemit.com/contest/@averageoutsider/new-outsider-writing-contest-pick-a-topic-win-sbd-or-sbi-steembasicincome

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