This blog post, was written well enough to make people feel they actually attended with you.

• You shared the experience
• Details about each part of it.
• Extra "info" (like we couldn't take the bottle) which makes it personable
• You included the actual ad, rather than just say "had a charity event"
• Even the ad itself didn't talk about the boats at the bottom of the lagoon

....There is nothing I'd change in this post.

Now if you look at someone like @papa-pepper, I think your quality of posts match his...

Which means your writing style and attention to detail a year from now will be regarded a lot better as you slowly develop a following.

I really did enjoy this post