A Newborn Maybe: Plus I Added a Few Words For You To Read!
I heard the cries.
So I tried to listen with my eyes.
I saw the skies.
So I tried to reach out for the prize.
I burned my hand.
So I watched my blisters grow as planned.
I felt the sand.
So I knew I'm stepping on dry land.
I found a maze.
So I went all four separate ways.
I walked for days.
So my mind could clear out all this haze.
I neared the end.
So I used my lifeline: call a friend.
I made this blend.
So I shared it here and hoped to trend.
Loved these line man:
Perhaps it was lost
So it didn't worry about the cost
Maybe we are in pain
It makes me wonder why we are even sane
I read your word
It took to me to places absurd
Its what I need
For my soul to be free of greed
And I loved this line from you
"Its what I need
For my soul to be free of greed"
Lots of artists in steemit
You're quick with the rhymes today. What I wrote might look like a rush job but fitting nine syllables in each 'so' line was a decent challenge.
Oh trust me I noticed the that your lines had more than just the rhymes. The controlled flow of a rhyme makes it only a better treat.
Mine is merely what I felt after reading yours :-)
Hopefully my upvote gets you there!
I’m a positive thinker. You never know. Good luck!
Every contribution is one step closer. If it goes somewhere, it goes somewhere. If not, it doesn't. That's life and I'll just try again tomorrow.
It almost moves if you look long enough.... or maybe im high.
I agree.
I also felt the same.
They don't let me sell shrooms here so I did that instead.
When I stared it pulsated and then yelled at me!
Am I seeing and reading innuendo where there is none?
Was your friend a female, and did you use your gun?
In the morning, did you call her hon?
Use your little gun on a hon and your bound to see the sun.
I'll shut up now.
Yeah, shut the hell up.
HA! I joke! I joke!
Whatever is happening here, in reality, will remain with me.
The art is great! In my eyes it's like a newborn coming out from the fog haha! For the writing I have told you before you are on fire and full of rhythm lately!
Thanks. This one started out as something gruesome but as I was blending everything together and adding more, it seemed to want to be something else. So that's what we get, I guess.
The writing, well... I'm just trying to have some fun. I don't have anything today. The brain isn't working right so I might just take the day off.
A good rest is necessary from time to time! Well I think I can understand what you mean, sometimes what we create takes on a life of its own!
Well I still managed to put something else out today but it looks like I've lost even more support so I don't know wtf I'm doing anymore.
If you feel that way maybe you should think about it a little, about what you want and return with a clear mind and I am sure that when you will feel better everything will work out!
43 likes out of nearly 3800 lookers? I'm obviously doing something wrong.
Or maybe not, things have ups and downs, some may not see the post or don't ever check steemit every day. Maybe its not something wrong with the content, I would suggest to check it for some more days to get a more clear conclusion and decide what to change. Of course this is a really personal opinion as you are more experienced than me here.
I'm sure there are many factors at play here but I'm the only one I feel comfortable blaming. I want to do better, and that's up to me. I know I'm not doing bad, but at the same time, there must be something I can do to make things better. I just don't know what that is yet. LOL
My favorite stanza of them all
I feel that 100%
I guess it's like coming to a crossroads and trying them all.
I've been trying new things with this blog lately. Can't seem to impress very many these days. I don't know what to say anymore.
Awesome work as usual man!
Thanks a lot dude. This one seems to be coming alive for some folks. I produced it while I was tired and delirious so I thought it was just me. I guess not.
i think there is a pain in your words...except from this pain.. it is wonderful your words and your art of course...
Tons of it! I thought about writing another post where I kill someone but I did this instead. Maybe I should have killed. Oh well. Too late now...
what did he do to you?
I don't know who he is and I don't really know what you mean.
i thought that there was a real man that he did somthing to you :)
but all is science fiction....
sorry for this confuse :)
Remember you can still have your "ask the audience" and "50/50" lifelines left, also nice picture.
Yup. That was a Who Wants to be a Millionaire reference. Good catch. Is that show still on?
I think maybe syndicated versions of it still exist.
Looks like we have a winner here! I might have gone with 6 syllables in your second lines but I'm not the poet. The artwork is a great start to a book on fake medical illustrations.
That seems to be the showstopper, that one. And yeah this has some internal organ/flesh-like thing going on. I was going to use it for one of those strange It's Done posts where I kill someone, but I changed my mind.