A Newborn Maybe: Plus I Added a Few Words For You To Read!

in art •  4 months ago

I heard the cries.
So I tried to listen with my eyes.

I saw the skies.
So I tried to reach out for the prize.

I burned my hand.
So I watched my blisters grow as planned.

I felt the sand.
So I knew I'm stepping on dry land.

I found a maze.
So I went all four separate ways.

I walked for days.
So my mind could clear out all this haze.

I neared the end.
So I used my lifeline: call a friend.

I made this blend.

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A Newborn Maybe

So I shared it here and hoped to trend.

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"Short and sweet today, yes, but the art took all night to produce. I hope you liked it."
"Have a nice day!"

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Loved these line man:

"I found a maze.
So I went all four separate ways.

I walked for days.
So my mind could clear out all this haze."

Perhaps it was lost
So it didn't worry about the cost

Maybe we are in pain
It makes me wonder why we are even sane

I read your word
It took to me to places absurd

Its what I need
For my soul to be free of greed

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And I loved this line from you

"Its what I need
For my soul to be free of greed"

Lots of artists in steemit

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You're quick with the rhymes today. What I wrote might look like a rush job but fitting nine syllables in each 'so' line was a decent challenge.

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Oh trust me I noticed the that your lines had more than just the rhymes. The controlled flow of a rhyme makes it only a better treat.

Mine is merely what I felt after reading yours :-)

So I shared it here and hoped to TREND

Hopefully my upvote gets you there!
I’m a positive thinker. You never know. Good luck!

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Every contribution is one step closer. If it goes somewhere, it goes somewhere. If not, it doesn't. That's life and I'll just try again tomorrow.

It almost moves if you look long enough.... or maybe im high.

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I agree.
I also felt the same.

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They don't let me sell shrooms here so I did that instead.

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When I stared it pulsated and then yelled at me!
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Am I seeing and reading innuendo where there is none?
Was your friend a female, and did you use your gun?
In the morning, did you call her hon?
Use your little gun on a hon and your bound to see the sun.

I'll shut up now.

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Yeah, shut the hell up.

HA! I joke! I joke!

Whatever is happening here, in reality, will remain with me.

The art is great! In my eyes it's like a newborn coming out from the fog haha! For the writing I have told you before you are on fire and full of rhythm lately!

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Thanks. This one started out as something gruesome but as I was blending everything together and adding more, it seemed to want to be something else. So that's what we get, I guess.

The writing, well... I'm just trying to have some fun. I don't have anything today. The brain isn't working right so I might just take the day off.

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A good rest is necessary from time to time! Well I think I can understand what you mean, sometimes what we create takes on a life of its own!

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Well I still managed to put something else out today but it looks like I've lost even more support so I don't know wtf I'm doing anymore.

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If you feel that way maybe you should think about it a little, about what you want and return with a clear mind and I am sure that when you will feel better everything will work out!

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43 likes out of nearly 3800 lookers? I'm obviously doing something wrong.

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Or maybe not, things have ups and downs, some may not see the post or don't ever check steemit every day. Maybe its not something wrong with the content, I would suggest to check it for some more days to get a more clear conclusion and decide what to change. Of course this is a really personal opinion as you are more experienced than me here.

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I'm sure there are many factors at play here but I'm the only one I feel comfortable blaming. I want to do better, and that's up to me. I know I'm not doing bad, but at the same time, there must be something I can do to make things better. I just don't know what that is yet. LOL

My favorite stanza of them all

I found a maze.
So I went all four separate ways.

I feel that 100%

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I guess it's like coming to a crossroads and trying them all.

I've been trying new things with this blog lately. Can't seem to impress very many these days. I don't know what to say anymore.

Awesome work as usual man!

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Thanks a lot dude. This one seems to be coming alive for some folks. I produced it while I was tired and delirious so I thought it was just me. I guess not.

i think there is a pain in your words...except from this pain.. it is wonderful your words and your art of course...

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Tons of it! I thought about writing another post where I kill someone but I did this instead. Maybe I should have killed. Oh well. Too late now...

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what did he do to you?

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I don't know who he is and I don't really know what you mean.

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i thought that there was a real man that he did somthing to you :)
but all is science fiction....
sorry for this confuse :)

It looks like someone's intestines after drinking a freezie from Speedway after mixing all the varieties together.

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Yeah it definitely has that kind of vibe to it. I've never been to a Speedway though.

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They have summer specials on their freezies and fountain pops. I usually see people (and my grand kids for that matter) layering different flavors, which come in different colors, in their cups. It comes out quite colorful...how it all taste once it starts melting and blending together I have no idea and somehow think I'd rather not want to find out. lol.

There's a burning bird's head in the top right-hand corner when you hold it upside down.

There's an upside-down burning bird's head in the bottom left-hand corner, which is shorter.

Is it a phoenix or isn't it there at all?

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I didn't produce this one upside-down so there's a strong chance pareidolia is kicking in for you.

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Is it treatable?

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Nope. You're done. You have three days. Make the best of it. I'll send the bill in the mail. It should arrive in two days.

Remember you can still have your "ask the audience" and "50/50" lifelines left, also nice picture.

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Yup. That was a Who Wants to be a Millionaire reference. Good catch. Is that show still on?

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I think maybe syndicated versions of it still exist.

I found a maze
So I went all four separate ways

Looks like we have a winner here! I might have gone with 6 syllables in your second lines but I'm not the poet. The artwork is a great start to a book on fake medical illustrations.

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That seems to be the showstopper, that one. And yeah this has some internal organ/flesh-like thing going on. I was going to use it for one of those strange It's Done posts where I kill someone, but I changed my mind.

@nonameslefttouse - The Writer/Artist/Poet Himself!

Rocking those words today dude! 👍

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Just having some fun.

Maybe I'm too bad with art to understand it... but the penetrating shadows give me more of a fading feeling instead of a birthing feeling...

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Everything I do is open to interpretation. It's more fun when people paint their own conclusions. That's why I don't attempt to describe what I see, or even offer some kind of meaning. It is what it is, and that could be everything and nothing all at the same time.

All friends are dear to us. A true friend is a guarantee of lifetime full of happiness and great advice.
Btw you have maintained a perfect rhyming scheme in this poem.
LOVED IT

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Hey! I appreciate that. Every time I play around with words like that, I never know if its a real poem or not, because I don't know anything about poetry and I don't want to step on anyone's toes. I'm glad you like it though. Just having some fun here.

Awesome...and trend it will...

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Thanks. The trending part though? LOL! I won't hold my breath. It's already losing momentum, but that's just how it goes I guess.

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If this fails something other will succeed...I am sure you know this way better than me...
Wish you all the luck...

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It's never a failure. Only a smaller step forward.

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I like your attitude towards life...
Lots of love...
A small step forward and then a big giant leap :)

It looks like an Aurora ... and the words you added are very beautiful, they complement it.

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It does have a bit of an aurora effect. Plays tricks on the eyes and moves like one as well it seems.

Wow! It is very poetic of his words with a very strong philosophical value in them.

It is a very interesting life lesson to be analyzed to discover the character of the content so that it becomes a living enlightenment.

Beautiful poetry ... The picture looks like a baby starting to gestate!

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The title of it suggests something like that but A Newborn Maybe means something else. I see what you mean though, and I did stash away a blurry little baby face down at the bottom, just for fun.

Very nice words..! :)

Those words hit me like a jab from AJ.

I couldn't even comprehend until the end.

I go through the lines four times to blend.

No doubt this will trend.

I love you man, this is soothing. It made me rest.

See you guys in the morning, am heading straight to my bed.

I'm Living here
Who told you there
Yeah now, come and tell me
Am living or dying, here

Oh love when you come here
Must come and see my grave
I know when you shall arrive
I will not more here

@nonameslefttouse so logical things are written. great buddy

a recion born still in the mother's bag, this is great! well i see it so i love your mix