This was a great place to jump into the story! Very engaging writing and bless Ruth and Joette for buying you breakfast :) I am curious as to your method - were you writing nightly on your ride, or writing later looking back in your memory? Very happy to have found you, looking forward to getting to know your back inventory when I have some time :) This is a very impressive post! Your song rocks! Sort of a Cake x G Love with Special Sauce vibe, nice performance!

Even though you are already serializing this, my only constructive criticism would be to seriously consider breaking these down into more manageable chunks. People don't have the time that it takes to properly enjoy a post like this, and only posting one big post every infrequent period doesn't generate the engagement that posting smaller chunks more often would. I mean this in the friendliest of all possible spirits, and of course take it with a grain of salt suitably sized for an alien eyeball on a tentacle.

Cheers - Carl