Wipeout.
Dragged and tossed,
beaten with the candy floss cloud.
The sharp coral waits below for a taste.
The result of a small miscalculation.
Which way is up, or down?
Holding the breath,
resisting the urge.
The throat tightens.
Everything will be fine.
Just put on your favourite track
and enjoy the wonky disco.
From Bali - Have a beautiful day legends!
Now see! This is a non-rhyming poem that I understand. Maybe if I get into it emotionally I could do the non-rhyming ones better. So far only my rhyming poems have been good enough, to me, to post. Even some of those are questionable. I'd sure appreciate it if you would give me your poetic opinion of the ones I have on my page. Like this recent one I wrote: https://steemit.com/poetrycontest/@johnwjr7/steemitpoetrycontest-6-my-sister-s-hero that is a true story and I think I did well on it. It was for an upcoming poetry contest and the lines were limited, but I think maybe that worked out in my favor.
Thankyou for your kind words John! Although i could barely class myself as a poet - it would be a pleasure to read your poem.
I think the beauty of writing, is that there is no right or wrong. You are only subject to your own thoughts and judgement if you choose :)
Yeah, that is true also, no real right or wrong, but I'd still like others to like it, especially here on Steem.
first thing I always tell myself in that situation is 'relax'. Obviously I say this in my head because I don't want to waste precious breath and go into a panic. haha
Fear is healthy, panic is deadly!
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Mantab ! Saya suka dengan puisi dan gambarnya teman.
Regard :)