Fallen angel : an experiment.

in #poetry4 years ago

I


A fallen angel touched earth
foetal within her wings cradling her form
the last decent thing nature gifted her
The earth touched her
a bier for her monstrous shape
already coalescing into dust
stiff like grains of sand
her divinity stolen by an ordinary gust
and named her a martyr blessed a saint
The moist earth embraced her
even as heaven turned away
not missing the absent alleluia
the silent hosanna in the highest
even as lucifer raised his first symphony
a dirge and welcomed another demon home


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II


Lucifer welcomes another demon home
He raises a symphony a dirge to
juxtapose the silent hosanna in
the highest the absent alleluia missing
as heaven turns away
The moist earth embraces her
names her a saint blessed a martyr
but an ordinary gust steals her divinity
Stiff like a grain of sand coalescing
into dust a bier for her monstrous shape
The earth touches her nature gifts her
a last decent thing her form cradled
within her wings touched by earth
a fallen angel


I am still experimenting as usual. What I did this time was take a poem and turn it upside down in other to create a mirror-like effect. My aim is to see if meaning will change from one poem to the next even though their basic context remains the same. Do you think I achieved this?

📷: @warpedpoetic

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How you keep putting out this sort of work I'll never know. Nailed it, again.

Thank you sir. I just write as my spirit leads. I really can't say how it comes

Probably doesn't matter as long as it's there. Nice work.

Yeah. Thanks sir.

Great. You nailed it.

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