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RE: Semana 1 de ficción de Wordsmiths: El líder desaparecido

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Dear @wakeupkitty,
First of all, I apologize for misspelling her name.
Next, thank you very much for your reply to my feedback.
My feedback is based on how the story felt to a first-time reader. The magical world she creates is very attractive, but to understand some parts, the reader needs to think deeper. Sometimes she pretends that the leader followed the red-haired girl willingly. Other times it seemed he was trapped and suffering, unable to escape. When considering the theme, it is a little unclear to me whether the key message is about love, being trapped, or something else.
Except for that part, I truly appreciate the way she organized the story and the creative twist she added. I respect her writing, and my feedback is only to support her writing improvement. Once again I am thankful to you for your thoughts.
cc @gertu.

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    I think there is a mistake here with reading my comments, @senehasa.

    • First, thank you for correcting my username. I am @gertu.
    • Second, I thanked you for your suggestions.
    • Third, I am sorry that the translation did not allow a better understanding of my narration.
    • Fourth, I did not criticize your understanding of my writing, as a first time reader.
    • Fifth, the one you are pointing out is to @wakeupkitty, a writer I invited to participate in the contest.

    Thank you very much for the contest and I'll see you in the next contests.

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      Thank you very much.

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        Hi dear,
        I can understand that it's for a simple minded person hard to follow the story. I like to add to that those for sure will not read it because it's simple too long and most likely they don't like reading.
        What surprises me is that you wrote among the 4 rules (see 3 and 4) that is was an easy written story. Perhaps it's good to change that since it's the opposite of what is said in the first two.

        I wish you a happy day and thanks for taking the time to reply.
        Super!

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