Hi @luces. Thank you for joining the contest! You have a very intense subject here, and you’ve done a nice job with the suspense building, which is difficult to do in just 100 words. Getting some editing help from someone with really strong English skills could really help to make your story stronger. For example, several sentences run together without periods at the ends of the sentences, and there is a part of a quote. Feel free to edit the story up until the deadline.