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RE: The Scarmaker (An original short story)
I will implement that idea of the part breaker if you dont mind, i like it.
I see now the use of the active tone clearer also )))
As someone who studied to be a masseurs (did i spell that correcrtly...?), you described all the parts very well, i was very impresssed!
The only small advice i would throw in, is about the assumption she was alone. I mean in life we always assume things, but something causes it, even if its an absence of ring or "that look on the face"
In any case i enjoy this, very easy reas, flows well, and leaves me to wonder where this will head
I am not sure what you mean by the "part breaker" but by no means, go right ahead and use it. LOL
If you are a guy, and I assume you are, “masseur” is correct, while if you are a girl then it’s “masseuse.” Yet if you would like to avoid a gender divinity you can say “massage therapist.”
Thank you for your advice. Good point.
Appreciate you stopping by and reading.
Cheers
Im a guy =)
By part breaker i meant those twidly black lines between parts of text )))
Oh, sure. By all means.