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RE: Gnik the Dreamer - Art Prompt Writing Contest #4
Although difficult to read I found somethings a little out of sync. Put it in his pocket? He was in his underwear.
Made a fire and breakfast but still had the coin in his hand?
I just think it needs another quick read through.
I would also rather have it being a story with a good or bad end and not ending in a guide to life.
Just my personal feedback. Well done for having a go and putting it out in the world for people like me, a very poor writer, to give comment on.
Awesome, thanks for the feeback. I'll definitely see if I can make some of these changes today, especially the parts that are out of sync.