Good flow! I already feel like I'm in the mind of the protagonist. And the bit with her not knowing her eye color is a great detail. I like the ending sentence as the hook, but I think it might have more power in the first paragraph, perhaps even the first line. Just my opinion though, thanks for post! Cheers!
Hi there and thanks for the advice. :) And thanks for reading. One day, one of those days when I can actually write for fun again, I might just make this longer. :)