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RE: Writing Fiction a novel - Exclusive for Steemit - Diamonds and Deviants 14
Hmm, who is that interesting young man?
One little comment... The following paragraph, I needed to read it about 3 times before I got my head round it. Maybe that's just me being a bit tired and slow at this time of night. But thought I'd mention it.
He had already proven that he was glamoured to the extent that he would tell of her visit and from how Demonica had behaved, she had thought that Celtica was dead until she found out about the deaths of the brother and sister mercenaries.
Yes, thank you... it's not you, it's me. I need to re-work that.
Oh.. and the interesting young man?
I don't know... I've forgotten LOL
As long as you remember in time for the next chapter ;-) Otherwise I'm sure Celtica will remind you.
I hope someone does! It'll look a bit daft otherwise ;)
Haha! Maybe I'll be the only reader who remembers, so it'll only look a little daft and can come out in the editing round. Hope not though!