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RE: New Story - again written exclusively on Steemit - WiP - Bouncer Part 23
Hmm, I'm not sure I'm quite convinced. I think Zack's people skills are better than that. I think he would have thanked Sinbad politely, pretended to accept his story, but underneath suspect what had really happened. I can't see that he would have gone out of his way to ensure Sinbad stayed an enemy. Though of course we all have our occasional lapses in judgement... (Oh and you still have your comment about the physio in there)
Here's what I've done... I'll add it into the next episode (once I've written it).
Zack nodded, mouth down-turned, appraising his explanation. “So you decided to come up here all on your own to rescue us?” he said.
Sinbad’s eyes narrowed. He studied Zack. “I don’t know what you’re trying to imply,” he said.
“I’m not trying to imply anything. I appreciate you coming up to help us out. Thanks for watching our backs. I’ll do the same for you one day.”
Sinbad studied Zack, watching the taller guy, a frown of suspicion on his face. He folded his arms, making the biceps bulge under his shirt. “Is that it?” he said.
“Is what it?” Zack asked, his face a mask of neutrality.
“Is that all you have to say?” Sinbad said.
Sinbad’s scowl seemed belligerent to Zack and he sensed Taylor approaching. Zack waved Taylor to stay back. Sinbad moved his head to see Taylor better.
“What you you want, Taylor?” Sinbad said with a snarl curling his lip.
“Let it go, Sinbad,” Zack said. “You’re marked up as on duty this evening and the CCTV cameras will be recording this. You don’t want the good turn you just did turning into a brawl with you in the starring role, do you?”
Sinbad looked from Taylor to Zack and thought about the advice.
“Yeah? Well like you said, you owe me one. Don’t forget it,” Sinbad said and turned away.
Yes! That sounds much more like Zack. Off to read the next episode now.
I think you're right! I'm going to change the scene. Hold on and watch this space... or at least the space where the next instalment appears :D
Ah... I'll sort out the comment about physio... thank you :)