This was a very well written piece. You set it up quite nicely, and it has such a poetic feel to it. The dynamic between the characters are fantastic, and the dialogue feels very genuine. Great work all around.

I see you're new here, so I just want to extend a warm welcome :D For fiction pieces, place the tag "fiction" in the first spot for easier discoverability. "writing" would get it mixed up with blog-type pieces, so if you ever write those, that would be the tag to put in first. You've set the bar pretty high for yourself, but I have no doubt that you would surpass it every time. Good luck here! :)