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RE: [Original Novel] Pressure: First Encounter, Part 2
Fuckin' awesome dude. Kind of a cruel place to end it though. I hope this doesn't turn out like that episode of black mirror with the guy who tries the VR experiment.
The lucid/waking dream setup is super spooky, I'm hooked now. Dig the wormwood reference, looking forward to these resolutions.
There is some fucking awesome imagery. I also dig the pacing.
I found a section that needs an edit, if you care to change it:
Leonard and Nate had stayed behind in the Argyro, she had last seen them watching other intently over the kitchen table.
Good catch, thank you. I really was determined to capture the sheer weight and magnitude of the physical forces involved and everything technologically necessary to counter them.