Unmoving - Broken
This story is part of a new universe I created in this post.
Unmoving - Broken
—by @CryptoSharon"Death will bring me joy, I'm sure!", a maniac's scream echoed through space and into Carlos' ears. He looked at the sky. It was filled with red clouds that reflected on the ice mirrors that covered everything around him. He lied there, unmoving. Of course death would bring anyone joy in this world of immortals.
Rumors say that fire filled this world before, and then it just froze over. Time was too old to remember the beginnings. Maybe Carlos was here back then when this all started. He coud not know. His memory did not reach that far. And now he could not move his limbs. He would need to heal for centuries until his broken bones would fix themselves. He wanted to scream too, but his ruptured lungs had no air in them.
He remembered the day when she had come, the sapphire teenager who had charmed his heart frozen by an eternity spent in this ice inferno. He smiled, she smiled, then she left to far away lands. The desert had never been so lonely as at that moment when he realized that he would never have her.
Steps were suddenly heard around him. Hard, boot-against-rock thumps approached him and the murmur of the trio's outward thoughts could be heard.
"Flat Carlos corpse" said almost unintelligibly a neanderthal lady who had grown alone in a mirror cave. She was taught to speak when she was already too old to assimilate grammar.
They stood around him and, with an enormous paddle that a man carried on his back, they separated his body from the icy mirror he had fallen on and put him in a sack piece by piece.
Thoughts are hard without a brain, as is perception without nerves. But Carlos felt his body healing little by little in the cave he had been put in. From the void where his mind dwelled, he felt the warmth of the mysterious life this world granted, invading his being again. This tragedy could not be forgiven.
He would find the creator one day, he promised himself, and punish him for giving his spirit eternal life. He would slay the essence of life to be able to die at last together with his sorrows. Dying would bring him joy. He was sure of that.
I don't know what all the fuss is about... I wouldn't mind being immortal at all. Well, that concept is impossible, stars burst and all that... so I would eventually die or desintegrate or whatever.
Now your story placed me thinking of some deep stuff....interesting.
Cheers Sharon1
It's more because he's sad and unreconciled, so life is always misery for him and he projects himself on others, thinking that no one would want to live forever. I myself think I would enjoy that :D But not in Hell O.O
Thanks for taking your time to read it. <3 I'm glad you enjoyed it.
hola de nuevo te acuerdas de mi?, hemos perdido el contacto, no puede ser ;)
aqui estoy, espero no perder contacto contigo.
Holis. :) Puedes hablar conmigo en t.me/CiudadCrypto si quieres. O enviarme un PM a t.me/CryptoSharon. Estos días he estado muy muy ocupada montando todo lo que necesito para Steemit, que es muchooo. Es un oficio que no para de exigir ni de dar.
¿Cómo estás? Veo que haces muchos resteems. Me cuesta encontrar tu propio contenido en tu perfil.
eso es malo? jjejeje.
y gracias por responder, se echa en falta eso, algunos postean postean y postean pero no contestan nunca a nadie, me gusta la gente que contesta y esta atenta por eso me fije en ti.
queria preguntarte precisamente por algo que comparti, si miras en mis post no te costara mucho encontrar los ultimos mios, hay uno de musica es para que me digas que sientes al escucharla porque es bestial!, no es musica exactamente, es sonido pero es muy potente.
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me sale esto en tus links
usas discord tambien podriamos por hay, aunque tambien por aqui mismo en mensajes aunque no es tan bueno para interactuar.
Jajaja, no sé qué hiciste, porque ese link es malo. https://telegram.me/CryptoSharon
He estado trabajando en equipo alguna cosas, no sé a qué te refieres.
Y sí es medio malo para mí al menos, yo trato de seguir a la gente que publica contenido de alto valor para poder leerlo y comentarlo. Pero si pones tantas cosas ocultas lo que ponen las otras personas a las que sigo y no me queda de otra que quitarte el follow. :PPP
En Discord soy CryptoSharon también. Quizás me encuentres por ahí. No estoy en ningún servidor que te pueda compartir el link. Pero no me gusta Discord, aunque ahora lo uso porque en Steemit tienen una obsesión con él.
que rapida eres contestando asi da gusto, te pareces a mi en eso, jeje.
pues me referia a trabajar en equipo aqui ayudandonos al maximo, yo trabajo en equipo con mucha gente aqui ya somos unos cuantos cada vez somos mas y cuantos mas mejor, algunos se pierden otros entran pero siempre hay gente dispuesta a ayudar y trabajar en equipo.
sobre lo de compartir pues lo hago precisamente por ayudar es una de las formas de ayudar aqui si te fijas y aunque no te guste e compartido tu ultimo post ¿no te gusta eso? jajja
sobre el contenido de calidad tenemos un tema para tratar horas casi mejor por el chat, tambien me gusta la calidad ¿conoces a alguien que no? todos queremos mas y mas calidad pero la calidad es subjetiva y lo que para unos es bueno puede ser malo para otros, ademas me e dado cuenta de que aqui premia la popularidad mas que la calidad e visto post de una calidad inmensa y no tener ni un voto y post que son una kk y tener $$$$ a miles porque votan los que votan o ellos mismos bueno ya sabes, hay una pequeña mafia aqui tambien igual que en otras redes (youtube, facebook etc), aunque aqui no es tan visible y esta un poco mejor repartido todavia hay mucho que no me gusta(auqnue intento no mirar ese lado), mis post tienen calidad al menos la tienen para mi, no soy experto pero muchos que entren aqui de nuevos lo son, no todos somos artistas o unos super escritores excelentes para escribir post impresionantes somos una mayoria que cada uno aporta lo mejor que tiene, es mas, pienso que si aqui en steemit solo se veria calidad 100% eso asustaria a los nuevos que no entrarian porque no se verian capaces de crear contenidos que compitan con esos estandares de calidad, bueno creo que todo esto es un tema muyyyy largo pero seguro que compartiras algo de lo que digo y otras cosas no logicamente.
yo tengo musica de calidad por ejemplo, esta mucho mas abajo ya no da $ porque es de hace un año pero es de mucha calidad, solo recibi 7$ con la que mas, es un ejemplo. (musica echa por mi 100%)
yo lo que hago es un poco de todo, a veces traigo buena calidad otra veces ofrezco lo que tengo a mano pero siempre que sea real, no se como explicarlo, no solo compartir por compartir, se comparte porque se quiere dar algo a otros para que lo vean realmente, si cae algo de $ bien pero no solo con el $ en el objetivo, x ejemplo comparti un audio que no es mio que hace unos efectos impresionantes al escucharlo y tenia ganas de compartirlo para ver que le causa a los que me sigen y los visitantes que lo escuchan.
Sí, respondo rápido porque uso a @ginabot. Pásate por Discord entonces para hablar mejor. Con lo de calidad me refiero a que me gusta leer unos pocos posts pero que me satisfagan, no tener un feed gigantesco donde la mayoría no me interese.
Para mí es más la diferencia entre tener que filtrar y no tener que hacerlo. Así que en lugar de filtrar adentro de mi propio feed, filtro a la gente a la que sigo para siempre tener cosas bonitas en mi feed, o cosas que quiero ver porque son los posts de mis amigos.
Sí, me alegra que me hayas hecho resteem, y todo el que quiera que lo haga, pero no lo exijo ni yo haría tanto resteem, quizás por miedo de perder seguidores.
https://discord.gg/Rn9u3k
me pregunto si quieres trabajar conmigo en equipo. creo que lo haríamos bien.
porque tienes puesta a una china con orejas de raton en el chat? jajajja
Porque de la lluvia el río y del río el mar y del mar el árbol y del árbol el fruto y del fruto el gusanito que pasea en el jardín.
que¿? jojojojojojo ;)
On the contrary, being immortal means you get bored eventually :) And if you're an evil immortal, then you can only be destroyed by having yourself chopped into bits of pieces and littered everywhere. And then calling out and tempting suckers to put your pieces back together in exchange for promised riches that you will never deliver.
At least that's what others tell me. I wouldn't know.
You're narrating Voldemort. :PPP I wouldn't mind being an evil immortal. It would mean I would seek enjoyment everywhere no matter the cost! Maybe my overall happiness would go up a notch.
I actually wasn't thinking of Voldemort but that's quite perfect haha! Although now that I think about it, I'm not sure I can think of anything else that fits. Greek immortals, but no matching story.
I think many stories about gods carried parts like this. Having essential parts separated from them. Thor's hammer was stolen once, I think, and Samson got his hair cut and then he was murdered, I think? And Prometheus was tortured for life, Satan sent to Hell (both are quite similar, actually, Prometheus gives fire, Satan gives the fruit of knowledge, both get sent to eternal damnation).
Achiles' heel got revealed and then he got done. I don't know, I suppose there are more like that.
Another great story, I don't know why he hates being immortal, I would love to be Biologically immortal, so that age and diseases can't kill me but i can end it whenever i want.
Thank you :)))
Well, he's grumpy. I would also love being biologically immortal. His case is a bit tragic, though, so he's lived for who knows how many millions of years of misery and is still hanging around. Immortality is a highly debated topic and I would certainly love a piece of that cake.
<3
I wonder if he considered how he would feel the joy if he didn't exist? Yeah, I know, it's just a story...
Hahahahaha, "but how did he feel pain if he's fictional and people who don't exist can't feel!?!? I can't understand this story!"
<3
Ok I misinterpreted hahaha, so he would be dead. He would exist but dead, but he would be unable to feel joy. I suppose he interprets "joy" - "sorrow" as a scale and he's so deep into sadness that feeling nothing is good? I don't know, ask him. :D
I wrote a blog on this sort of thing too. It's on thoughts and thinking. You might even like it?
I can't find it. What's its name?
"ever wonder why you can't stop thinking" and there is another one called "let me save you some soul searching" there aren't too many of them I've only been on 2 weeks lol
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STOPHe must be a very sad guy to want to die with all his sorrows!
Ye, he was devastated. You read the last one, right? I mean, the one about the sword. That's the part that's followed by the summit, then this one. His story is a bit interesting, but I have it on stand-by while he recovers from his splattered brains.
Hahahah poor brains. I haven't read the one after the summit. Will check it out. :)
I love stories and you words are so vivid. I will read thru part one. I also started a series more like a photo story book type called the bear kid series. You are really good. Who are the authors who inspired you to write so well?
Awww, thank you. :) I'm happy you feel that way. I think you'll enjoy my earlier stories too, but the effort I put in each of them is different. However, I think they're all very creative and different, so I'm sure you'll find something that pleases your eye.
Bear kid series. I'll check your profile out. I haven't been on Steemit these last few days, but I'm back with full force! I'm also glad you left a comment. It helped me remember to follow you. That way I won't lose your profile again.
I don't know who inspired me lol. I read a lot of book series as a kid. Harry Potter, Narnia, His Dark Materials and other YA books. I remember that when I was 15-16 I was already writing poetry that people loved, it was in a mood similar to the one in this story, although way more abstract. Then at my university I was forced to read many books, Shakespeare's sonnets and plays, Beowulf, a lot of literature criticism and theory, about old genres, French literature. I wrote many thousands of words of academic essays and blog-style articles for evaluations.
All of this is just to say, I don't know which authors helped me build the way I write. I just attribute it to all of them: to my favorite topics about post-modernism and romanticism; to Shakespeare's mysteriousness; to Philip Pullman's writings about passion, bravery and yearning for adventure; to Baudelaire/Poe's dark poetry; and a great part to black metal lyrics, which I spent the lonelier part of my adolescence reading and analyzing.
And Chinese webnovels... can't forget that crappy quality that made me pine for perfectionism.
amazing sharon, as usual. I don't know why but I love this part:
"Thoughts are hard without a brain, as is perception without nerves."
Hahaha, me neither. Maybe it's the graphic description of the way it physically works, coupled with a poetic context and a psychological story. I guess we'll only find out if we know more things you like. We may find a pattern. :)