Wow. Nice work. Did you steal this directly off my blog? http://www.trode.ca/short-story-deep-end/, or did you get it from the Writer's Group I used to belong to? Either way, this isn't your story, and you couldn't even tell people what it's about, which is pretty telling in and of itself. You have no idea what I meant by "the not waters". Take it down, thief. Write your own works.