I was at a government agency once, the kind that helps you look for a job, here in Cyprus, and they typed everything I said on the computer. Unrelated stuff that I just said while chatting, and also wrong. I realized it when an employee later looked at his screen and mentioned something I had said to an earlier worker. They don't even hide it. But they won't warn you beforehand. At least phone companies do, and they tell you the reason too. And at least phone companies are recording what you're really saying, not an interpretation. If they want my info, then they should 1. ask for my permission or warn me and 2. print whatever they wrote and ask me to sign it, sign that I indeed said those things. (The specific agency looked for reasons to make you ineligible to look for work.)

Anyways, good story. It's hard these days to portray things that happen online, data gathering and selling and such. I mean, imagining it as a movie, how would a director film it? Show people typing at computers? Where's the movement? Where's the action? Whereas in your kind of almost sci fi scenario, you make something a director would find more actionable, and the whole mood you create - drawing of blood, which many people dislike - it puts you in the exact mood you were, I assume, aiming for. I think it was Philip K. Dick who wrote that science fiction is keeping just one true element from real life, and then changing everything else. You did just that: you kept the illegal data gathering and selling, and the rest you fictionalized, quite creatively. 👍