There was good flow here, I could easily picture them talking. I like how you put traces of tension in the scene, building up towards the end! And poor Liz, she’s not in safe company especially with that last line. Very eerie.
Real quick, just as host of the contest, I want to say that for this week it’s okay what you did with the prompt. It’s creative! But it’s supposed to be a continue the story contest, as you know. In the future the prompt really needs to go at the beginning, and then you tell what happens next to have a valid entry. I guess I didn’t explicitly put that in the rules. I’ll update that next week, but for this one you’re all set.
Thank you for being so broadminded. I thought I will be disqualified at the first false start as they do now at the Olympics. :)
This story just went this way and I couldn't do much about it. In the future, though, I will try to keep it at bay. If my mind will throw a curveball at me in the future I will simply not going to submit it to the contest.
Cheers!
If that happens I hope you'll still leave a link. It might not be an entry but at least we'd get to read it 🙂
Thank you! I'll try to keep it within the guidelines though. :)