I like the simplicity and starkness of your final paragraph.
It stands out particularly as your story covers so much complicated history.
It brought me back to the 'now' moment which was that he was hungry and wanted a pizza!
Well done phil-glaz
I like the simplicity and starkness of your final paragraph.
It stands out particularly as your story covers so much complicated history.
It brought me back to the 'now' moment which was that he was hungry and wanted a pizza!
Well done phil-glaz
Thanks for your attention! I am so glad!