RE: My Journey with Actifit August 2018 – App Info, Activities, Earnings, Tokens
This is, in many ways, an awesome post. You provide the editorial content we're always looking for by telling your story with the app: your experience, benefits, and insights. I really appreciate that.
And, well, you know what comes next. We've been doing this for a while: I had some issues with style and grammar. Lemme cite some examples.
"I’m using it for a month and a half and through all august 2018" has a couple of issues. To start with, "I'm using" is in the present tense, which does not work when you go on to talk about a period of a month and a half. It should have been "I've been using." Next, the second part is redundant. We're in the start of September. If you've been using for a month and a half, the second part is obvious. If you do want to have that time stamp, you could add a separate sentence: "August 2018 was my first full month using it."
"Couple of word about the project." Dalz. Buddy. You know better. "A couple of words."
"The team is doing a good job for now and they are rolling regular updates on both, the app and the website." Again, a few issues. Since you're talking about a period of time, "The team has been doing a good job" would be better. And you know I love a comma, but there's a time and a place. And that time and place is often - and certainly here - before the word "and." This should have been "The team has been doing a good job, and they've been rolling regular updates on both the app and the website."
These and similar issues aside, I really did appreciate this update.
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Thank you for your review, @didic!
So far this week you've reviewed 18 contributions. Keep up the good work!
@didic thank you once again for the great review.
I'm trying to improve my style and grammar following your remarks. Also I'm using the Hemingway app as you recommend it.
About the issue with I'm using and I've been using, the interesting thing is that I first wrote I've been using, but then changed it. Now I'm clear with this, and will write it properly in the future.
About the issues like Couple of word instead of A couple of words I did the proof reading, but obviously I missed this. My untrained eye didn't spot it :). I will try to check this things with greater attention.