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RE: The Fractured - A Short Scifi Story Written In 24 Hours
I hope you win this round this was really good. I liked the part especially about how he tried to control the heart monitor that was great description. The white orb and the way you introduced it and turned it into a lantern, when at first it seemed you know... "gates of heaven" was awesome.
Thank you! I was trying to show the speed of his cognition without the aid of the chip, first seeming otherworldly as he struggled to process the change. I am not sure if it is that good, there is tough competition, but I did have fun writing it