Hi @solarsupermama. I thought I'd just come on and give my @minnowmentor thoughts on this post too, as I'm going to run with you for the next few days.
Ok, so, first, love the fact that you have really thought about the title, and used bold to highlight the main points. I also love the style you write it, it's very personal and personable, and of course comes from a place of having real first hand experience.
I think the stretch for me here with this post is to make the sentences a tiny bit shorter. I tend to find it's easier on the human eye to read shorter, more spaced out sentences instead of big ones.
I'd also encourage a real flow...a journey. Make each sentence lead to the next one. Make it almost a step by step journey.
Bringing that into it may increase engagement. But I got to say, I think it's a huge improvement. Keep it up!
Hey! Thank you! I so appreciate your feedback. I have been thinking about digging into more of a journey, particularly an inner one. Also, the sentence thing is really funny because I've seriously had almost every teacher I've ever had tell me the same thing. I used to make page long paragraphs, and my teachers and professors would just be beside themselves. In my mind everything is connected. It's one long thought. =)