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RE: And shall Dæmons perish

in #tellastorytome5 years ago (edited)

The New Angels suffering a resounding defeat to the hands of Demons and Nature in the Garden of Eden <3 this seems like a fitting story to bring into to a break in the publication, a resounding victory where she is truly freed! It feels like there is a lot of metaphor in here, that I am glad came to such an evolved ending where you protagonist is able to reach a sense of being. She expelled the darkness trying to destroy not just her, but such a sacred place, and those stakes come across so well. Everything coming to her aid was powerful, the outpouring of support feels like it makes such a difference. It may be her that defeats It, but she didn't have to fight alone, the stand she took inspired others. Your revolutionary spirit shines though! This does work well as a stand alone story that still fits into your wider universe, and there is just so much really beautiful description in here, at times it feels more like you are describing a scene to play out in the mind than telling a story. There is a lot of action here, balanced with emotional progression, I would love to see this brought to life. A climax that feels as much like a beginning as an ending, very enjoyable <3

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UwU ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for the compliments!

Talks of publication? Now just you wait when I introduce Lucy Boy (Lucifer I think everybody can guess, but just for the non-English folx) in an independent story I am swirling around with rum and Slipknot's recent song - which influenced the last act. But tak! A resounding victory where she truly is freed!

As I shall crudely joke right now: all the metaphors are intentional, even when I hadn't intended a metaphor to be there. To be less crude, I am glad you found her transcendence to be lovely. Nota bene, it's not darkness (as we see darkness and lightness working together) but the annihilatory beast / the Void - however I do retreat and will humbly say that there really isn't a perfect antithesis of both light and dark. So my work must continue to find out, or create, the antithesis of light and dark - and annihilation/voiding seems to be that realm to explore.

I did love creating the collective individuality and individual collective of Everything coming to her aid. I conceit I tried penetrating catharsis, and I see the nectar is pouring just fine and shines right through all the comments I had received so far.

I am glad to see the story stand out yet fit in, one I intentionally had the back of my mind; equally so looks like my jestering around is working better and better! But I am gaily ecstatic for your recommendation and how to describe the core elements! Even noticing the climax's double movement of ending and beginning~ <3

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