This is a very well put together window into a wider world, and you set it so well, you tell a snippit that is indicative of the rest, a few little hints giving shape the the setting

This child, Maya's only, and likely last--although that decision was not entirely hers--

You establish that lack of control in her own life and her total acceptance of that so strongly, in so few words. Like this is normal.

I really like how you make this a story about the relationship between mother and child, the emotional experience they go through here. The lengths she knows she has to go to to keep her child safe, there is so much implication in the mention of names going on a list, and you don't need to say any more, it carries it so well.

This story is so well put together, i would compare it so a shining metal sculpture of facts, world building with hints of horror, wrapping the creeping growth of vines - the beautiful descriptions, the emotional approach you have given the story. A work of art.

I found the saleswoman fascinating. I like that you chose for her to be a woman, there is a stark contrast between her and the mother... to the point where i found myself wondering if she was a real person, or tech herself. Which in itself is a wonderful thing, in a world strictly monitored, where behaviour is automatically flagged, reported back, where people are chipped and tracked from such a young age, she feels like an example of what whole hearted acceptance of the situation does. Her glossy, smooth professionalism against the internal perspective of the mother did make me wonder what was going through her mind, as the mother is equally hiding the perspective we get to see below the surface.

I adore the chip in the foot, everyone wearing the same shoes, very much feels like a metaphor for the steps we blindly take, and the places those steps build up to lead us to.

A really enjoyed this one, and mulling over the implications, which has always been my favourite thing about this contest, thank you!

~ Calluna <3

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