The thought and detail you have put into how the world would look through the eyes of an octopus is amazing, i just love it. Every single line, choice of description, seems well chosen to reflect the perspective it is being told from, I really love the bit about repetition, and the human greetings that are always the same seeming so alien to her. The idea of this sanctuary, where a few humans have united with a whole selection of sea creatures, creatures evolved and advanced, creatures unknown or forgotten, it has a little bit of a feel of peter pan. In fact, at the end, with the mention of pirates, there was something that felt like this little oasis had been a sanctuary where the last of the humans who tried to live in harmony with nature have made their home. I really like the idea that this is representative of a greater whole, that the pirates are humanity's greed and destruction, caring not for the magical and advance life they destroy, the civilisations that may be far more advanced their their own, and are thoughtlessly raided. There is an element of survival here that comes across, everyone fighting to survive, even the pirates, but that metaphor gives it so much more meaning. One mans hunter is another (mer)man’s raider. The idea of Susan having grown into this, having made this journey many times, attended many meetings, first young and not necessarily taken seriously by her own people, to this moment at the end, delivering a rousing message of strength through unity just finishes it off so perfectly. A truly bananafish ending!