I cry because I thought you were mine

in #teardrops6 years ago

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Try not to talk any longer my affection.

Simply take a look at me

what's more, you will see how I feel..

Look somewhere down in my eyes

what's more, you'll see your name,

my spirit's broken mirror.

I adore you more than you accept,

like you are my life,

my other half,

my intuitive gatekeeper heavenly attendant.

Check out you.

Has anybody adored you more than I do?

Never cry my adoration.

cause you'll influence me to drain.

Continuously be upbeat

for your grin is a wellspring of life for me.

I inhale when you relax.

Be that as it may, pardon me

for what I say.

I know you don't feel anything.

For you I'm only a diversion

that you played with once

also, know you abhor

indeed, even to take a gander at.

I'm sad for my emotions.

I know they suffocate you,

they don't set you free.

Come and disclose to you abhor me.

That there's no other possibility,

no phony expectation!

Try not to indicate me however let me know.

And afterward I will abandon you.

I swear I will

You, my interminable agony.

It's not your blame.

I can't point the finger at you.

It's me who cherishes you.

Reveal to me reality,

what's more, you'll never observe your name written in my eyes.

Cause I'll keep our past and my adoration

in the base of my heart

what's more, I'll be no more

But my tears will prevail for me!

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I stopped to look through othr posts of yours.

I see a repeated mistake that spoils what you are trying to achieve.

Please stop trying to use words that do not belong, that do not express what you are trying to say - unless you are only doing so to impress friends that your knowledge of English is good.

You have a poet hiding inside you, but you are smothering him, destroying his images by using words for the sake of filling your poem with words not suitable to the emotion you are trying to paint for us.

Calm down, relax, write a poem in VERY simple English, as if you are writing it for a small child.

Keep in mind, if you wish to touch our heart, our hearts are and will remain like a small child, for as long as it cares and feels emotions.

I truly understand your point sir. I've taken note. Thanks

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