I'm a bit disturbed by the fact that it's in 3rd person, not in the 1st, as that somewhat destroys the "perspective". Other than that, it has a very good twist, and is very realistic in what humans actually do.

For some reason, though, I'm sorry to say I've liked your previous stories more. This one just doesn't connect with me that well. Don't know why. Maybe a bit too little character development, which is what I'm used to with your stories.
Don't get me wrong, I like it very much still, only not my very favorite of all yours. ^^

Thank you very much for your entry!