300-word story
....sounds like a fun challenge. . .
The lights flickered on, another annoying sign of decay in what was once a pristine palace of perfection. I just sighed as I walked into the room, knowing there were only five cans left in the bin. Now, there's only four. I really need a rush of brains to the head, here - something has to break, and if I'm not clever it'll soon be me.
It tasted horrid, but it kept my belly from growling, so it was worthwhile. And to think I used to dream about eating this stuff. Amazing how life changes. Ambling back to my perch, nothing was changed - no new motion, no new neighbors, nothing. Not unexpected, but still unwelcome.
The 'net was as noisy as always, but the hint of others was gone. All the lost-prince, free money, grow your sex, you won't believe content was still being pumped out by the bots, but nothing outside their background noise. Some people had apparently built up a backlog, some blogs and such were still updating, but nothing new, nothing current.
A thought appeared - I wonder, are they sitting there, waiting too? How horribly ironic if so. A quick login later, and "Hello, world, just sitting here waiting. Are you waiting too?"
And then I was waiting again.
212 words
I read this “story” twice, but simply don’t get what the story is about. It’s hard to call this a fiction story. You said “perch”. It makes me think of a parrot. So what’s the deal with the net? How does it connect to the cans? If this is a story, you failed to connect the different parts to make an understandable plot.
Please don’t let this put you off writing. You just need to bear in mind that your reader cannot always see what you are thinking. Thanks for participating.
Sorry you didn't like it. The premise is pretty simple. The Net's still up, but nobody other than bots are still posting, and food's getting scarce. Rather than going out to find out the problem, the protagonist is just posting on the Net. . .
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