An engaging story. At first, I was following your writing style and word usage, but then got interested and forgot about technical issues, which is a great sign. Good character development. I enjoyed how you highlighted that the main character flaw is his feeling of entitlement. He deserved 5 extra minutes for a coffee, deserved a dream house this would probably continue with him feeling he deserves the best girl, etc. I like how you’ve confronted this assumption of certain exclusivity with the reality and now, these slowly brewed problems will burst into a cascade of acute problems. That’s a perfect setup to show what kind of person he really is and how will he handle this pressure or crumble under it