Thank God that this is a fiction story because you were killing me of anguish.
I really liked how you told the story; I felt something of Allan Poe in her (am I wrong?) but I would have liked some exact elements of physics. That would have given him more intrigue.
In my opinion (I am not a literary critic) you made a delicious story, with elements of suspense and very clean grammar. It was a great pleasure to read you @rakushasu