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RE: NaNoWriMo Excerpt #1 -- The Dealer (Somnolence)
While it is well written and I dont read "horror" type novels, I still have the feeling that I have already read it.
Maybe you need a different start. Like
He looked down on the files. There were so many of them. How could that have happened? Was it his fault? it all started a week back when....
(Of course a bit longer ^^)
I guess I should have clarified, but this isn't the beginning of the novel. This particular excerpt actually comes from near the end of the book. I led off with this excerpt because it's the closest thing I have to a single, self-contained story.
The book switches between supernatural or nightmare imagery and more gritty, real-world prose. The next excerpt will showcase some of the more typical character interactions, so you might like that more. Thank you for reading, though.