Interesting story the way it began, Creatr - not crazy about the ending - You don't need to spell out that it's Adam - the story carries well enough on its own and you run the risk of being hokey. You avoided the usual pitfall of scripture quoting but the story's too long - divide it into two parts. Also, I know this is aggravating to you, but you already have a pseudonym - why use the other nom de plume?
You know why I'm telling you this - This was a damn good story and you could have made a lot more in terms of rewards.
BTW, you quoted a stoic philosopher to introduce your tale - another innovative way of avoiding the usual pitfalls while making a point - subtext, subtext...I got it, and that was also subtle but challenging for your reader. That's what I mean - it works on the subconscious level, and I was so glad you did that.
By the way friend @johnjgeddes. Very illustrative your comment always one learns new things from people featured in steemit like you. Best regards
Thanks, John, for your heartfelt, encouraging, and instructive observations. I appreciate your feedback, and take your advice quite seriously as from a writer I have great respect for. Taking your advice seriously does not necessarily mean acting on it, though I appreciate the opportunity to do so, at least in part.
The good news is that by God's kindness, I'm less in need of fiscal rewards at this time, though just as needy as ever when it comes to the reward of having my work appreciated and encouraged. You, along with several others, have seen to that today, for which I am indeed grateful.