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RE: UNPROVEN Chapter Five "Run-In"
Oh shoot! That's why Chpater 6 puzzled me a bit! I had just gotten back home and I saw this in my desktop browser's tab but had the next chapters on my phone. So sorry about that..
I really like the meet cute between Ary and Grayson (Graysanne anyone?). It's brief, yet it drives the attraction home. I like how it happened early on in the story, it gives the dynamic room to breathe a bit as the inevitable conflicts mar their path. The conversation is playful, and one can't help but be attached to Ary's geeky awkwardness. A+ sis!