I love the way you dispense with the quote marks for dialogue and use the hyphen:
— Hello hello!
— Luken miserable! You finally arrived.
— Hi Karl, hello guys.
I've seen whole novels written with no quote marks of any kind (e.g. Kent Haruff's Plain Song), but it's hard to sustain for a longer work. For this story, it's just right.
"Her senses fell into a ravine" - great line!
And along comes Carlos.... ohhhh, ouch!
Thank you so so so much♡♡
I might have to mention it at the Freewrite Favorites post even if it'll be past payout.
How many of us have upvote power anyway? My "dust vote" fell from 2 cents to one.
worthless... I need to go power up.
Love your writing style!!! If you check out #freewrite stories and respond to the prompts, you'll find a welcoming and supportive writing community.
Wow, thank you very much! I'm glad you informed me ♡