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RE: Hellbent - Part 1 (My Original Short Story)

in #story7 years ago

I like the start. Uhmm one edit needed:

Joe remained expressionless as Joe shifted the direction of the barrel of the gun.

I think should be: "Joe remained expressionless as Miguel shifted the direction of the barrel of the gun. "

Like I said great start. And that bottom picture if to do with the story, I know it is going to be a very very good story.

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Hey buddy, thank you so much for the feedback! Much appreciated!

(p.s. Error corrected. Thanks for spotting in.)

It really is a good start, from some of the comments, I may be wrong on the relationship direction, but will wait and see and read how it all pans out.

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