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RE: Hellbent - Part 1 (My Original Short Story)
I like the start. Uhmm one edit needed:
Joe remained expressionless as Joe shifted the direction of the barrel of the gun.
I think should be: "Joe remained expressionless as Miguel shifted the direction of the barrel of the gun. "
Like I said great start. And that bottom picture if to do with the story, I know it is going to be a very very good story.
Hey buddy, thank you so much for the feedback! Much appreciated!
(p.s. Error corrected. Thanks for spotting in.)
It really is a good start, from some of the comments, I may be wrong on the relationship direction, but will wait and see and read how it all pans out.