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RE: Uziel new character development in the story-mentor program
I like this one!
I have a new challenge, just for you.
Write Uziel into your story, making the reader understand how powerful and utterly discompassionate he is to human suffering, without using this back-story summary.
Also, I'd like you to take a little more time with your next episode. Write it out into a doc before you post it to steemit and go through it with a view to slowing down the action, using commas and more description of the characters' actions.
I think you have the skill-set to do that.
Thanks for your input. I wrote it up using the back story. So I am changing it into showing. Your directions will help me improve the story and my skills. The pressure is on. I am glad I did not post it yet.
Now rest I saw your post with your shoulder pain.
Here it is Mausoleum Part 8 Just posted Yay!